Crazy Vegetarian White Girl
Oh, Luis, you get so close to being relatable and sympathetic and then you just say dumb things…
So, last week, I felt bad about cutting back to a twice-weekly schedule. But then I didn’t get any work done on new strips last week, either. So, now I don’t feel so bad.
Nah, Luis’s still a high school student, still trying to figure out a balance of machismo and honesty and romanticism that actually works for him. He still hates being teased, and he still hates focus on things that he hasn’t actually figured out for himself. This characterization is good. (and isn’t the entire high school condition that they “get so close to being relatable and sympathetic and then [they] just say dumb things…”? ;))
But can I suggest a modification to Luis’s biography, please? It’s really confusing to have Nate’s bio mixed in with his the way it is (too many commas!). I’d write it something like this:
“A sophomore at Sagebrush High, Luis is the younger brother of Nate Aguila, a Sagebrush football star who graduated and now plays at Western State University. Luis is a paraplegic, confined to a wheelchair after suffering nerve damage from an incident provoked by use of illicit drugs.”
But then again, why do we need to know about Nate’s backstory in Luis’s bio? In Nate’s bio, it’s not mentioned that Luis is paraplegic. The only mention there is “leaving behind his younger brother Luis”.
[also: if your characters boxes are supposed to have portraits, they’re not showing up? I just see blank boxes there.]
This is really the only slice-of-life/soap-operaesque comic that I read, and you really do a good job with it. Thanks for creating it and sharing it!
I’ll take a look at the bios. They were not written all at once, but as the story progressed and characters appeared, which makes more sense as they appear in order/context on the “Characters” page (http://www.theutopiancomic.com/characters/). But yeah, standing alone, I can see your point.
Either way, thanks as always for the feedback and support!